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People are mistaken who believe the high Rockies
are hard to climb. To the traveler who has passed through the plains
of Kansas and eastern Colorado, the high Rockies might seem like a
beautiful but forbidding wilderness, approachable by only the toughest
mountaineers. It is true that the 53 peaks in the Rockies that soar
over 14,000 feet in elevation should only be attempted by seasoned
climbers. However, the peaks under 14,000 feet, the fourteeners, can
be easily climbed by the average person. Actually, climbing
Colorado's fourteeners is hardly a rugged experience because most of them
take only a day to climb, involve no more than hiking and simple
scrambling, and are conquered by many people each year. |
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Surprisingly, unlike expeditions
to Mt. McKinley or Mt. Everest, a climb up one of Colorado's 14,000 foot
peaks rarely takes more than a day. Pike's Peak, with the state's greatest
base-to-summit elevation gain, is admittedly a strenuous climb, yet a
retired college professor in his middle seventies makes the hike every day
in the summer. A friend of mine, Carson Black, in a day, once
climbed four fourteeners, three of which--Crestone Peak, Crestone Needle,
and Kit Carson Peak--are the most challenging in the state. Even more
revealing is the Bicentennial celebration by the Colorado Mountain
Club. It planned to have members on the summit of every fourteener
in the state on July 4, 1976. Only a handful of ascents took more
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Colorado's 14,000-foot peaks are
also fairly easy to climb because they require no special climbing
techniques. The "knife-edge traverse" on Capitol Peak is
probably the most infamous challenge, yet most hikers who carry ropes
don't use them when they see the ridge is not very intimidating. The
highest peak in the state, Mt. Elbert, is so simple to climb that a jeep
made it in 1949, and one man "rode a 24-year-old bicycle to the
summit in 1951" (Perry Eberhart and Philip Schmuck, The Fourteeners,
p. 38). I personally saw two motorcycles on the 14,000-foot ridge between
Mt. Democrat and Mt. Lincoln. |
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Another indication that climbing
Colorado's highest peaks is not very difficult is the sheer number of
people who succeed each summer. After descending from Torrey's Peak one
weekend in August, I counted over seventy cars in the parking lot. On a
week the previous August, I passed fifty people in various stages of
climbing Mt. Elbert. Even years ago--in 1968--4226 people climbed
Longs Peak (Paul W. Nesbit, Longs Peak, p. 68). Its parking lot today, to
accommodate the number of climbers, is about a quarter-mile long. |
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If I've shattered your belief that
Colorado's peaks are the domain of only bears and mountain men who look
like bears, consider how Zebulon Pike might feel about Pikes Peak
today. In 1806, he "predicted that the mountain would never be
climbed" (Eberhart and Schmuck, p. 6). Now, via the cog railway or
the toll highway, he could reach the summit without moving his legs. |
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